User:Deezytings/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Water intoxication

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article because I plan to complete my "do your own experiment" on water intake. Water intoxication is not widely talked about and can be extremely dangerous. Education is the key to prevention. If people understand their bodies and the conditions they could be faced with then they could take better control of their health.

Evaluate the article
The lead sentence clearly articulates the topic of the article. There are sections within the page but they are not mentioned beforehand. The noting of how many mL rats can consume did not seem necessary to me but overall the introduction was very concise. The measurements themselves are not a distraction but to give myself a better understanding of the numbers I did revist volume conversion. Content includes risk factors, prevention, treatment and cases of when this happened. The most recent case was in 2020. There is a Pathophysiology section and it is missing the definition of what that is. There is no equity gaps mentioned within the article but I don't believe any would apply to the topic being discussed. The tone is neutral and there is no position to be taken. This article is meant to be informative not persuasive. Sources include medical, military and clinical journals. Sources are mostly from 2003 - 2008 and when doing my own research I see there are only a few that are more recent. However they are not peer-reviewed, only health based sites. The links do work and authors do vary from each source. The article is very well organized with its sections. I saw no errors and found it very easy to read. There is one image in the lead section and it is not caption, it links to related topics. It is of a a cup of water being poured and when clicked it leads to the original page. The talk page notes that this condition is extremely rare and it should not be listed under prevention category. Some wonder if it should be merged with the Hyponatremia category. Others are expanding on the amounts of water that can be safely consumed. We have not yet discussed this in class but I did think about it when trying to plan my DYOE. I found the article to be great, it is very strong in the risks factors section but could be improved in the Pathophysiology area and prevention. It is very well-developed however i would have liked to see more detail about how much people can or should consume in a day.