User:Degenag/Transferable skill/Steven Jenkinss Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The added content is provides a lead to the article through defining what a transferable skill is more than the original article. It provides jumping off points that could be explained in a greater extent within the article body like collaboration, problems solving, communication and self control. The article uses some information from the original article then builds on it in a substantive manner to provide a foundation for the article. The article maintains a neutral tone as well.

The areas in which improvements could be made is mostly in formatting and organization. The section added appears to be the lead but is written above the lead section as a title for the article. Cutting and pasting the added section into the lead would fix this.

Another area to be improved upon is in the citation. The citations provided in the article do not link to the journals they are citing making it confusing to find where the information is coming from. Copying the link from the intended page and citing from there would fix this issue. This would make it easier for the reader to exactly find where the information is coming from.

The article so far seems to focus transferable skills in STEM careers and STEM education. Some information that could improve the article could encompass other subjects like the humanities that may also benefit from education targeting transferable skills. This could be a major part of the body of the article as the transferable skills in the humanities may be similar or different depending on what research says.

Overall, with some formatting fixes, this is a strong lead for the article.