User:Dengtianhei/Dushu Lake/Amy YDY Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dengtianhei


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dengtianhei/Dushu Lake


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dushu Lake

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi, I think so far you made an effective contribution on the article, which is good for you to expand more. The current version of the article has a lead and you expanded some points from it as sections (i.e. History and transportation), which contributed the topic appropriately. The contents you wrote are closely related to the topic and are informative. Here are several suggestions for you that may help your editing:

Firstly, you can write more description in the history section. For example, as you mentioned "historical records about human activity", you can expland this into detailed information to illustrate specifically what "foundings" prove it.

Secondly, your sources are all websites. Most of them are news from social media. I'm not sure if they are reliable, but I would suggest you to look for some journals, or books about the Dushu Lake as reference.

Finally, I think you will expand more on your article. Here are some recommendation of potential sections that you can add: 1) geography 2) Important events or disaster 3) In culture, etc. And it will be better if you add some images in your article.

Overall, I think you made a great effort on your draft and keep working!