User:Dengtianhei/Dushu Lake/Serena Chen 009 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dengtianhei


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dengtianhei/Dushu_Lake?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dushu Lake

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi friend! I am impressed with all the work you have done to your sandbox draft. You have made a good amount of editing to improve the article. Your lead is clear and straight forward, you structure is well organized, you tone is neutral, and I can see that you have used various sources for your content.

One thing I noticed is that there is an link embedded with "Dushu Lake Tunnel". I know that this link was first made in the original article, but since it doesn't lead to an existing page, I am not sure if it is necessary to link it again in your "Transportation" section or even keep the original link in the lead section. Perhaps you can talk with Mako or Kaylea to double check on it.

There are also some small grammatical issues within the text you put in, but I will try to help revise them, and you can check on my edits in your page's history.

Great job!