User:Denverpenver/sandbox

Lead: Lead length is great. I know guidelines say 1 paragraph per section, but I would consider omitting the last paragraph in the lead pertaining to history. Seems unimportant, and is kind of an abrupt change from an otherwise cohesive lead.

References: Add references for facts in the lead section (sexual transmission paragraph + treatment paragraph). Seems like you added a citation at the end of each of those paragraphs, but I believe you’re supposed to add a reference at end of each sentence, even if they are from the same source.

Disease section: Disease section is perfect. Great job expanding this section! Really important that you explained all the other possible areas of infection, as most people just associate gonorrhea with the genitals. I also liked how you said “infection of the throat” instead of just pharyngitis. I might use that same style to describe meningitis and endocarditis, which appear at the end of this section

Diagnostic methods: You mention PCR based methods are the most commonly used, but there is not much information on what exactly they entail. I would expand that a bit. The phrase “the diagnosis is made” is potentially confusing. Consider rephrasing to “diagnosis of male genital infection is made by visualizing…” I didn’t change this directly b/c not sure if that is the wording from the source and you were trying to reword it to avoid plagiarism. Also, I would briefly explain what gram stain is, and what culture is.

Other: I think wiki-links should be added the first time a word appears in the article. For ex: septic arthritis is in the first paragraph in the lead, but isn’t linked until much later. Great job overall. I am impressed by how much you added to this article!