User:DerGeister/Video game developer/Skylerkv Peer Review

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DerGeister
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The draft looks good so far, there's not too much to edit because it looks like you're planning to add more information on each lead that you've created (so take these revisions with a grain of salt, I'm sure you're planning on editing what you've had typed). I'm excited to see what will be added on!

It seems similar to a "How-to" using "you" multiple times, might seem a bit casual but not necessarily in a bad way.

Story "Either way you need to start with figuring out what genre of game it is that you are making" seems a bit too casual, maybe combine with the previous sentence and also because there is no either/or within the sentence it is in currently. Capitalization for the next sentence (there -> There) and possibly edit the name of "List of video game genres" link to be lowercased to match the part of the sentence it is in -> list of video game genres (you're able to edit the name of the link by clicking on it, should highlight a box around the link when you're able to edit the shown name)

Programming I know that the lead says programming but it may be good to also add programming before "language" at least for the first sentence to clarify it better for later use (ie. "There are currently multiple programming languages that can be used when creating a game."). It may be helpful to add some programming languages and their pros and cons for specific usages or common uses. It may be nice to add an example like Minecraft was created with Java.

Assets "In this part of creation is where what you will visually see is being worked on." maybe reword to say what the player will visually see, because it might seem a bit confusing since the developer is seeing both front and back end development vs players will be able to see front end items. Maybe combine the latter sentence to be one since they are directly related or use a different starting word than "meaning" just because it seems like it should be connected as one sentence with the wording, "Meaning the environment, characters, and any items needed to be shaped out.". Also it may just be me, shaped out means sounds like it is created in a software like a 3D creation suite (like Blender (?)), but I'm not too sure. (ie. "This part of game creation is where the developer creates the visuals that players will be able to see; the environment, characters, and any in game items will need to be modeled, rendered, rigged, animated, and more.")