User:Destructionuser82/Kirloskar Brothers/Haakad1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Destructionuser82


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Destructionuser82/Kirloskar Brothers


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Kirloskar Brothers

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think that the addition of a new section of the article is useful and insightful, bringing forth an understanding of an under-represented portion of the discussion on this topic. Overall, I believe that this is a very useful section of the Wikipedia page. It provides a good amount of detail to supplement the information already present. I will say, though, that it sounds a little discrete and I don't know if I find that it flows well. Maybe some transitionary sentences between the bigger blocks of details would be helpful. I would also add some information about the exact effects that the Kirloskar Brothers' ventures had (e.g. how were their "fodder-cutters were a great success"? What were the subsequent effects of this?). For some general notes, you should reference the relevant Wikipedia page the first time you bring it up, not the second (this may have been an oversight on your end for the reference of Aundh). Also, what were the political issues that affected the construction at the temple mentioned in the edit?

All in all, a strong addition that can be tied together very easily.