User:Deswilliams22/Military psychology

Feminism
Women in military roles is an area of study receiving an increasing amount of attention. Currently women make up 10%-15% of the armed forces. As women tended to move to away from nursing and helping roles, increasing attention is given to how the brutal realities of combat would affect the women psychologically. Interesting research shows that, when affected, women tend to ask for help, more so than men, thus avoiding many of the long-term mental suffering that male soldiers face after their deployment has ended. (My contribution is meant to follow this sentence).

My Contributions:

One of the mental sufferings that researchers have been looking into lately is the link between PTSD, sexual harassment, and sexual trauma. Reports indicate that military personnel who report experiencing sexual trauma have a higher likelihood of being diagnosed with a mental health condition during their lifetime (e.g., PTSD) as compared to their civilian counterparts. Instructor feedback:

''I would highly encourage you to bring over additional components of the existing Wikipedia article so it is clear how your proposed edits will fit with the existing article. This will be particularly important during the peer review process. I am not sure what you mean when you write "mental sufferings". I would suggest you revise this statement. The terms sexual harassment and sexual trauma shouldn't be capitalized. I have placed some suggested edits above (underlined and strikethrough). I also have a question about the comparator for a statement. I do not think your final sentence fits well as currently structured. It feels like an aside. While I recognize the citation provided is from the APA (there is a technical error with this citation in red above), I would encourage you to review the assignment rubric. There is an expectation that you will include several examples of peer-reviewed secondary literature for this assignment.''

Revisions
For my revisions, I decided to omit the last sentence of my edit because I did not see a better place to put it. Twalton1996 suggested starting another topic on the page to fit the sentence but I chose not to do so. Primarily because this was addressing PTSD and that is not the goal of my page. I felt like making a heading that had to do with PTSD would mess up the flow of the article and give light to only one issue that military psychology tries prepare soldiers for.

Per the Instructor and Lancemason7's comments, I changed the wording of my edit. I decided to go with the revisions that the instructor provided. Pertaining to the citation, I wasn't quite sure what Lance meant by him being confused about my citation, but I did go back and fix the technical error that was on the link so I hope that resolved the confusion.

Lastly, Tanya mentioned switching the topics around to make History come before the other titles, Roles and Area of Study. I decided against this because I believe that it's important to know what a military psychologist is and the areas they study before analyzing where they've been put to use. The current sequence gives you a better understanding of the occupation/field and sets you up to understand what's mention in the history section a little better. I think this is appropriate.

Jcaine215 didn't leave me any revisions.