User:Deswilliams22/Military psychology/Twalton1996 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Deswilliams22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Deswilliams22/Military_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Military psychology
 * Military psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Deswilliams22,

This is an interesting topic. I believe that you are off to a great start. The contribution that you plan on adding will improve the content of the article. Have you thought about organizing it differently ? I think that changing the order of the content would also be beneficial. When I think of history, I think that it should be addressed earlier rather than it being at the end. The information that you added is clear and concise. I was able to fully understand it. The last sentence you added could be put under a different subtitle or you could create a new subtitle and add more information about it. Overall, I believe that your contribution is well written. I look forward to reading your finish product. Good luck