User:Devashree818/Hydropower in the Mekong River Basin/Peruan00 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Devashree818


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Devashree818/Hydropower in the Mekong River Basin
 * User:Devashree818/Hydropower in the Mekong River Basin/Bibliography


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hydropower in the Mekong River Basin

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content: Content looks really good, main issues are the flow and some info dumping in certain sentences that made me need to reread it over a few times to make sure I knew what organizations were being talked about. I think the first paragraph can be reworded a bit because there's something off and I'm not sure why. Something like "Environmental impacts have decreased water quality, ...., ...., causing a chain effect....".

Another thing is I feel like the paragraph is entirely full of introductions to various examples of social impacts but they're fairly vague. I think mentioning all the examples briefly but focusing on the details of one or two would be very interesting. Such as direct examples of how it caused food insecurity. Has the dam effected fish biodiversity, is the new area they relocated to extremely different to what they're used to, how to the impacts on people differ between those down stream of the dam and those upstream? I think these answers would make a really interesting addition. You have a really good base, I think going deeper on the sources you have and potentially adding new sources to reinforce your arguments would make it even stronger.

Tone: I think the tone was pretty neutral, no real complaints here.

Sources: I think you have a lot of great sources, maybe add a few more depending on the direction you go with further changes, but over all solid choices