User:DevilsHolePupfishFanatic/Lissachatina fulica/Xinyu Cai111111 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lee Fenuccio


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:DevilsHolePupfishFanatic/Lissachatina fulica
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lissachatina fulica

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Fenoccio,

I really like the improvements you made to your article. Your edits are really clear, concise and well-structured. You have a clear organization of headings and subheadings, accurate descriptions about the topics, a variety of information, as well as really cute image! Some of your sources are not really up-to-date, but I think they make sense under the contexts you refer to in your draft.

I have some very little suggestions for you and I think you can do better after fixing some minor errors:

Firstly, Some of your statements are not associated with supporting references, for example: "During the mating, the snails either simultaneously transfer gametes to each other (bilateral sperm transfer), or one snail transfers sperm into the other (unilateral sperm transfer)", "Transferred sperm can be stored within the body up to two years" and "In many places, this snail is a pest of agriculture and households, with the ability to transmit both human and plant pathogens. Suggested preventive measures include strict quarantine to prevent introduction and further spread", I think you need to add citations after each of the sentences.

Secondly, make sure that all your format is consistent. For example, "Schistosoma mansoni is a parasitic flatworm that causes intestinal schistosomiasis. Sporocysts of S. mansoni have been detected in snail faeces" I've noticed all the other sentences in the section have a period at the end, I think you also need to have a period after this sentence!

Thirdly, I think most of your information is reliable. But I've noticed that there is an error in reference 11, probably something goes wrong with the title. Fix it and you'll be fine!

Fourthly, you can make your statement more specific, for example, "In many places" in the section of as an invasive species, you can add some specific locations that you refer to here.

Finally, post more images if you want! I find the snail really cute and I'd really like to see more pictures of it! Great job and good luck :)