User:Devlin Vong/Agate/Ryan-is-Gneiss Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (Devlin Vong)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Devlin Vong/Agate

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?                                                No
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?    Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?                                                     No
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?                                                             No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?                                                                                                  Not overly detailed

Lead evaluation
Though the lead does not include all sections or represent all the information on the page, the page covers a wide verity of topics that are not all that similar which makes the very concise lead a good thing.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?                                                                             Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date?                                                                                            Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?                                           No it is all relevant

Content evaluation
It is all relevant and there is a lot information on the page that would probably be used to create a whole new page if desired.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?                                                                                                     Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?                            No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?                                       No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Tone and balance evaluation
The section is science based so does not have many opportunity for bias. Each topic is concise so no chance for over represented.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?                          Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?                Yes
 * Are the sources current?                                                                                                           Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work?                                                                                              Yes

Sources and references evaluation
A good amount of sources and all of which are relevant, current and work.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?                                                     yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?                                                                     yes
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? yes

Organization evaluation
Good organization of the paper But could probably include a header topic.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?                                                            Yes
 * Are images well-captioned?                                                                                                                                  Not all
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?                                                                                    Yes
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?                                                                                               Yes

Images and media evaluation
The images could be sourced and captioned better but are all useful. There could be more for the section added to help the reader better understand the topic added.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?                    Yes
 * What are the strengths of the content added?                                                                                                        Good non bias information
 * How can the content added be improved?                                                                                                               Better phrasing

Overall evaluation
There was a lot of information added to the page that was educational. The only fault in the way it was presented could be improved using a more concise phrasing and less terminology. This would also be improved by using using better words like crystallize instead of form in the first sentence.