User:Dgorny3/Tap dance/Laurensirianni Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dgorny3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dgorny3/Tap_dance?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tap dance

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: There isn't really a lead in this draft. Maybe add one sentence before the body to really pull the reader in.

References: You pulled three great and credible sources into your article. Maybe fact check with the professor about citing the same reference multiple times in the same paragraph. It feels a little off to me but if she says its ok then go for it.

Overall impressions: When it comes to such a powerful topic like segregation, it might be difficult to remain unbiased when writing about it. However, I feel that you did an amazing job at remaining neutral and delivered the information in a professional and unbiased manner. Your information is properly organized and I felt like I was reading the work of a real professional. Well Done!