User:Dhaynes0/Cane toad/Saucyluffy Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dhaynes0


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dhaynes0/Cane_toad?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cane toad

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?

I like how they tied their adaptation to how the species has become invasive to other habitats.


 * 1) What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?

How the toad adjusts to temperatures so quickly, like the mechanism behind this adaption.


 * 1) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

Add a little more information on the mechanism of its cold temperature adaptation.


 * 1) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? If so, what?

No, we have the same type of topic, however, I don’t know how their animal is adapting so I can’t compare much.


 * 1) Are the sections organized well, in a sensible order? Would they make more sense presented some other way (chronologically, for example)? Specifically, does the information they are adding to the article make sense where they are putting it?

Yes, they are organized well, and nothing seems out of place. I like how their sentences flow with one another.


 * 1) Is each section's length equal to its importance to the article's subject? Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic?

I feel like it could be a little longer, though, with the amount of information on the page already, and with it being a featured article, I can see why you wouldn’t want to tweak with it much.


 * 1) Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?

A little, but more to tie it into the invasiveness of the species.


 * 1) Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral? For example, "the best idea," "most people," or negative associations, such as "While it's obvious that x, some insist that y."

Nope.


 * 1) Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors?

Yes, however, I can’t tell what information is coming from which source.


 * 1) Are there a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources? If so, it may lead to an unbalanced article, or one that leans too heavily into a single point of view.

There are already very few sources on the page so many of the cited sentences come from

We only used two sources for this assignment.


 * 1) Are there any unsourced statements in the article, or statements that you can't find stated in the references? Just because there is a source listed, doesn't mean it's presented accurately!

The statements made are not cited in the paragraph directly, but the sources are listed.