User:Dhrunil9/sandbox

Article Evaluation:

The article I chose to evaluate was the Wikipedia for Video game addiction. My reasoning for choosing this article was that I am an avid video game player and have read into Video game addiction before. Upon first opening the page, I noticed there was a banner suggesting that this page be merged into Gaming disorder proposed February 2018. I read through my Video game addiction article and then proceeded to read the Gaming disorder article. What I found was that a lot of information was pretty much the same. Looking at the visual queues like the pictures in both pages, some of them also were the same. I believe that with some editing and some reorganization the two pages could be merged. Another thing I noticed with my article was that there was a banner saying that the page relied heavily on primarily primary sources and that more should be added. (MORE OF WHAT TYPE OF ARTICLE? PRIMARY, SECONDARY?) I did some random selection of the sources and found that 20/25 I selected were primary sources. One of the biggest concerns I had was in the section related to the deaths by the disorder. I think there should a clarification that the deaths were not caused by the disorder itself, but health related problems such as violence, emotional confusion, lack of physical activity, and many more. (I THINK THIS IS A VERY GOOD POINT). I think that this section should clarify this point. Upon checking the names of the people and sources cited with them, I couldn't find many articles regarding their deaths. Only a select few had multiple news articles or websites that showed the people actually died. I think further investigation into this should be prompted. Also, this could be because most of the deaths occurred in the early 2000s. Maybe I should add more sources that prove relatively modern age deaths. One thing in particular that stood out to me was when it was mentioned that Contradictions in research examining video game addictive-ness may reflect more general inconsistencies in video game research. For example, while some research has linked violent video games with increased aggressive behavior, other research has failed to find evidence for such links. (DOES THIS STEM FROM EXPERIMENTAL DESIGN? WHAT ARE YOUR THOUGHTS ON WHERE THESE INCONSISTENCIES COME FROM?) This stood out to me because from a medical/class learning standpoint I was taught everyone is different. Some may be able to play violent video games or high adrenaline games for many hours but never really collateral with real life. (COLLATERAL? I AM UNSURE WHAT YOU MEAN?) I used to play Grand Theft Auto, a game known for high violence for hours some days, but this never made me want to go out and re-preform some of the actions I did in the game in real life. (SO YOU ARE ADVOCATING THAT MOST PEOPLE SHOULD NOT CONFUSE REALITY WITH FANTASY?) Another example is that I'm an avid racing game players. I once played Need For Speed, a racing game that allows players to drive cars and disobey traffic laws but this never really never changed the way I drove in real life. I obey all traffic laws. (WHY DO YOU THINK THIS IS? WHAT DOES THE LITERATURE SAY ABOUT THOSE WHO OBEY LAWS, YET ENJOY GAMES WHERE THEY BREAK THEM?) This article is really in some need of refinement and editing, but overall this was a pretty good article and minus the few draw backs it has, I believe that this could give some insight into what Video game addiction is if you never heard of it before.

Things to Add or Note:

For the most part, what other editors are saying is that we need the addition of multiple secondary sources. There is also the confusion of people not really understanding what the treatments are according to the editors. Some have mentioned the idea that they once heard of electroshock therapy and so I may try to find sources and such that maybe could shed some light on exactly what the treatment is and what are the side effects of each of the treatments. I DID A QUICK PUBMED SEARCH AND ELECTROSHOCK DIDN'T COME UP, BUT THERE ARE SOME REVIEWS DISCUSSING TREATMENT OPTIONS PRIMARILY FOCUSED ON ADDICTION THERAPIES (https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/29502754). Someone suggested that we could possibly link each treatment to other wikipedia pages so people would not be reading paragraphs. I see both sides to this. One it saves people from seeing too much on this wiki page but the down side is that if we link it to the other pages, we would need to verify and ensure those wikipedia pages are up to date and follow the guidelines. As I was reading the article's talk page there was some confusion of whether or not to merge the section about notable deaths with a new treatment section. I think we should keep it separate. I look into finding more sources and see if maybe I can see if a death can relate to a treatment.

Assignment due 2/3/19 and possible draft: '''I would encourage you to copy/paste sections from the article you are editing into your sandbox and working on it directly. Your sentence below doesn't quite capture the meaning of the one you are quoting. Essentially the author was saying that there is not enough written in the review literature to draw a conclusion, but preliminarily, other methods used to treat addiction (e.g., psychopharmacology) are effective.'''

I read your suggestion and found that the sentence "Behavioral and process addictions and particularly Internet and video game addiction require specialized treatment protocols and techniques." could be added to the section where the subheading for treatment could be added. The entire section reads as "Because few clinical trials and no meta-analyses have been completed, research is still in the preliminary stages for excessive gaming treatment. The most effective treatments seem to be, as with other addictions and dependencies, a combination of psychopharmacology, psychotherapy and twelve-step programs." I was thinking about rewriting this section to say " As a growing concern of video game addiction the use of psychopharmacology, psychotherapy, twelve-step programs, and use of continuing developing treatment enhancements have proven to show signs of the decrease the side effect of the addiction of video games." I would quote the source from the link you shared with me and rewrite the entire section. I can't seem to draw a conclusion nor have I seen a single statement have multiple sources, so I working on trying to find out how to go about this. (IS THIS THE ARTICLE YOU WILL BE EDITING FOR CLASS? I believe so.