User:DiaEdie/Sex industry/Exoticgiraffe Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? DiaEdie
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:DiaEdie/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation
The lead has not been updated yet as this is just a draft. I think that with the information added, the lead should be updated slightly to mention the additional information that was added to the article. The lead of the article feels concise, but also seems to just be a long list of items. Maybe think about adjusting this section as well to make it slightly more readable?

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
I think that the content added is extremely relevant to the topic. You do a great job at finding information that is pertinent to the topic that was not already there in the first place. I think that adding what you do about the different possible reasoning for a woman to go into prostitution is extremely important because many assume it is for different motives. You shed a neutral light on a very important topic. The content is up to date and the sources used are pertinent.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
As previously mentioned, the content you are going to add seems neutral to me. I do not believe that the claims stated came from any bias or position because they are stated as neutral and coming from reliable sources. I especially like the sources you draw from. I do not believe that the writer is trying to sway me to a viewpoint because of the somewhat neutral nature of the article itself.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
There are several sources added from reputable academic journals pertinent to the article. I think that the author can add more sources as there are only three, but the sources added are a great start. I would suggest finding more current articles from the at least the last decade to keep the information you are adding in the article pertinent to the times. I think the ones you have added are a good start so far.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
I think that the content added is concise and clear. I think it can use some grammatical edits, but this is only a first draft, so I think this looks great considering. I think that your organization is great though there are only two sections in your sandbox. I think to aid in the entire article maybe think about adding sub headings to large sections such as the "Prostitution" section.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
The edits do not add any images or media on it.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
I think that the content added is going to greatly add to this existing article. I think that the content added is extremely pertinent and is not already stated in the article. You bring up great points to include when thinking about this topic. I think you can improve this by adding more content and citing more sources especially ones that come from more recent times. Great start and great job overall!