User:Dianabmorales/Virtual sex/TriMinhHuynh Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dianabmorales (Diana Morales)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dianabmorales/Virtual_sex?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Feedback: Article focuses on addiction and long distance relationship. The contents are developed very well. Lots of statistics are provided.
 * Room for improvements:
 * Citation for this paragraph :"Virtual sex can become an escape and a new addiction for recovering sex addicts that are going through a stressful period in their life. Feeling triggered by life problems, prior sex addicts can find themselves using online pornographic content as a quick and easy, but temporary fix to help them soothe themselves, forget about life's problems, and feel better about themselves. Another pattern is when an individual takes advantage of the online sexual content to explore forbidden, hidden, and repressed sexual fantasies, which can become addicting and completely absorb the person into this virtual space."
 * Elaborate a bit on why virtual sex addiction has adverse consequences on marital status in relationship. First paragraph can be cut down into main points such as the last 3 sentences.

Evaluate the drafted changes
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