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Response to Peer Review
Michael gave good suggestions for cleaning up the grammar which I implemented when I added my changes to the wiki article. Textor Sensei gave good feedback on adding more general information to the Television Section of my edit. I will find more information and edit as suggested.

Editing: Pop Culture in Japan
My sections: Idol, Television, and Soft Power -  I copied and pasted the sections of the articles here and am updating them here in sandbox before saving it on the page.

Japanese idols[edit]
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Momoiro Clover Z is ranked as number one among female idol groups according to 2013-2017 surveys.[12][13]

Japanese popular culture is highly surrounded by idealized celebrities who appear on many different forms of mass media. One type of celebrity is an Idol. These idols are mostly young girls portrayed for their "cuteness" and "innocence"; they are mostly intended to be role models that everyone adore and promote a desirable image of fantastical happiness . They must have a perfect public image and be good examples to young people .

Idols aim to play a wide range of roles as media personalities (tarento), e.g. pop or J-pop singers, panelists of variety programs, bit-part actors, and models for magazines and advertisements . Alternative media idols include the emerging net idol, a form of idol in which grows popularity on the internet as its base foundation. Many net idol groups create a large standing online before transferring their career towards the professional Music Industry.[14][15][16][17][18][19][20]

The interactions between the Idols and their fans range from live video streaming, concerts, and handshake events. '''Because of their promotion as Idols, these celebrities appeal to many different demographics throughout Japan. The emotional attraction to cuteness, including the cuteness these idols have, is seen all over the world. However, the cute kawaii (カワイイ) culture is openly visible throughout Japanese society both visually in manga, fashion, and stuffed animals and internally in situations such as the relationship between idols and their fans. '''

The group Momoiro Clover Z has been ranked as the most popular female idol group from 2013 to 2017.[22]  During 2016, about 636 thousand people attended their live concerts, which was the highest record of all female musicians in Japan.[21] (I don't think this statement is necessary... unless I find more information on other popular groups and add it in.)

Sources:

1.Galbraith, Patrick W, and Jason G Karlin. Idols and Celebrity in Japanese Media Culture. Palgrave Macmillan, 2014.

2. Netflix, Felix Matschke, 1 Oct. 2017, www.netflix.com/watch/80163353?trackId=13752289&tctx=0,0,e15fc1e491549a0cf7507cb4f73efd072950be6d:98d318282ad697e27ce91c07a2a847c4a1385892,.

3. Visions of precarity in Japanese popular culture and literature. Iwata-Weickgenannt, Kristina,, Rosenbaum, Roman,. Abingdon, Oxon. ISBN 9781317619109. OCLC 897376746.

Television[edit]
Main article: Television in Japan

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Modern History
The demand for television had changed by the mid-1980's and the commonly viewed dramas such as family-oriented, historical, or mystery declined in popularity. These changes in demand were seen in national television throughout the world. The Japanese countered this decrease in demand by bringing in new celebrities known as "tarento" (タレント). These tarento celebrities are individuals whose influence stretches over different forms of entertainment such as contestants or hosts in game shows, commercials, or television dramas.

Other influences in making Japanese television popular are the rating system and each show's original music score.

Television Dramas (テレビドラマ)
In the western world, dramas are known to be pieces of literature or plays that have a shocking twist or conflict that causes conflicting endings. However, in Japan, a television drama or "terebi dorama" (テレビドラマ) is commonly thought of as a "Television Show" which can include drama, romance, and or comedy.


 * Popular Dramas
 * Hanazakari no Kimitachi e
 * Hana Yori Dango
 * Related websites
 * jdorama.com
 * Japanese Dorama Database
 * Related articles
 * Audio Dramas

3.Wilson, G. B. (1982). Three Hundred Years of American Drama and Theatre: From Ye Bare and Ye Cubb to Chorus Line. Englewood Cliffs: Prentice-Hall.

4. Gabriella., Lukács, (2010). Scripted affects, branded selves : television, subjectivity, and capitalism in 1990s Japan. Durham, NC: Duke University Press. ISBN 9780822393238. OCLC 662616872.

Soft Power
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These additions are great They tend to refrain from using biased wording and never mention "most people believe..." or those kinds of things. Some nitpicky copyediting you could do is maybe change "a form of idol in which grows popularity on the internet as its base foundation." to "a form of idol in which a growing ones popularity on the internet is its base foundation." or something. "They must have a perfect public image and be good examples to young people" maybe change this to "They must maintain a perfect public image and always try to set a good example to young people" In all your sources are great and you really added to the atricles. Mayson Crowe (talk) 01:49, 7 April 2018 (UTC) ____________________________________________________________

Article Evaluated: Japanese television drama

 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * They spend a lot of time speaking about ratings and how they are very important, but I feel like they should have focused more on the different styles of dramas or what impact they have on society instead of who/how they judge it.
 * They also say things like, "___ is very simple" which is opinion based instead of on fact.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * It talks about popularity of the different types of dramas which can be measured, but they also describe why dramas are often set in the past which is more opinion-based instead of real fact.
 * Are there viewpoints that are over-represented, or underrepresented?
 * There is only one viewpoint and it is is very neutral. They don't talk of any facts that might question their statements which makes them sound very professional,  but a little less credible.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * https://books.google.co.kr/books?id=z7I-VyCfZdQC&dq=A+Guide+to+Japanese+TV+Drama+Since+1953&q=big+chill#v=snippet&q=big%20chill&f=false This link is in Korean and not translated even though we went to it through the English page in Wikipedia which is confusing, but one can find the English text after looking into a bit more. Its just a bit mendokusai.
 * Japan Media Review The reference to this page just leads to a stub so it is not very informative.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * No. There are only three citations in the whole article so one does not know if it is fact or opinion without having a background of their sources and knowing what comes from what.
 * One of the sources looks pretty neutral because it was done by a college, but the other two are obviously from the Japanese point of view which does not bring too much variety.
 * It stays pretty neutral by not expressing personal opinions on specific dramas or actors. The main bias I note is that they speak as if from the point of view of a Japanese person speaking about the culture as if it is general knowledge which might be the case for a Japanese reader,  but not for one who is unfamiliar with Japanese culture.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * Because of the current popularity of modern Japanese Dramas, I think they could have focused a bit more on it so that people can see the influence and importance of it today.
 * Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * A lot of the things I pointed out were actually talked about in the talk page such as making current popular dramas a more detailed section with more pertinent information.
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * It is part of WikiProject Japan. It is currently a C grade and is marked as high importance to be edited.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * We talked a lot more about soft power and how the different parts of popular cultures have come to be while they focus more on facts and if something is relevant and true.

Copyedit an Article
I copy edited Japanese television drama. I hope my grammar changes weren't incorrect, but overall it is fairly well written.

Add a Citation
I went to the Citation Hunt and was able to add a citation about Divorce and if it is allowed in Hindu - Dharma.

JOURNAL ARTICLE

Ethics of Divorce in Ancient India

R. Naga Raja Sarma

Vol. 41, No. 3 (Apr., 1931), pp. 329-342

Published by: The University of Chicago Press

Stable URL: http://www.jstor.org/stable/2377858

Page Count: 14