User:Diarcane/Nanochemistry/Basketball2023 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Xiaoxu Qing


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Xiaoxu%20Qing/Nanochemistry?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Article sections are all present

All the sections are labelled

Content added is mostly neutral

Some of the content does seem to get a bit too long, perhaps adding pictures would be more effective

Perhaps some of the sentences can be rewritten a little bit using content from the Brogan textbook

Cosmetic paragraph can have some of the wording simplified, as some of the wording is not neccesary

Pictures will help make the content, as their is a lot of text

The references are good, as there is a lot used.The content is mostly up to date