User:Diegosalazarguerra/Oral Democracy/Ajsorota Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Diegosalazarguerra


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Diegosalazarguerra/Oral Democracy


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * n/a

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Diego! Really interesting topic you chose here -- I had previously never heard of the term "oral democracy," and I think your ambition to create an entirely new article, rather than simply edit an existing one, is truly commendable.

I think the overall structure that you've laid out here is logical and easy to follow. Your lead is also concise and informative; however, I would consider revising the last sentence in your first paragraph to make it more digestible, since I had a bit of trouble understanding its entirety. Furthermore, I think your use of case studies and your compiled list of references really helps the reader gain a clear conception of oral democracy in practice (although I would consider adding a few more sources, too). But it also might be a good idea to provide some more information about the theoretical grounding of oral democracy, and how Sanyal, Rao, and Prabhakar describe it in an ideal scenario.

Finally, I just have a few questions/suggestions regarding the content of the piece. For instance, how does oral democracy differ from deliberative democracy? I think a section clarifying the distinctions would be immensely helpful. Also, how have political theorists suggested that oral democracy can be expanded to operate within a larger society? Is this possible, or must it be restricted to small communities? In particular, how can the "consensus" model work in pluralistic societies, with groups that have different interests and irreconcilable preferences?

I hope these comments are constructive for you. Best of luck with the rest of your project!