User:Dinakmehta/Women and Gender Relations within the Parsi Community/Edwardmillet Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Dinakmehta
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Dinakmehta/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Dina has created her own page and so there was no lead prior to her creation.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * The lead does accurately give an overview of the topic she will be discussing in the rest of her article.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * The lead does not have a description of the major sections but there is a table of contents describing a breakdown.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * No.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * It is concise but I would say that it seems in her article there clearly has been a struggle for Parsi women and that could be briefly touched upon in her lead.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes completely and in fact it is very well detailed.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * All content is new
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * No.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * I believe all content is neutral and that Dina has done an exceptional job at putting material into her article that is compelling and interesting but underscores a neutral tone. Furthermore, I enjoyed the cases and think that was a great addition.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * I do not see any content that has any explicit bias. She does a great job of removing bias especially so in the judicial case as sometimes bias can be shown in those instances. However, there says there will be an argument against UBI so I am assuming it has not been placed in the article yet and therefore the article is still neutral.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Yes as far as I am aware the sources are good and from reliable entities.
 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes it appears the oldest source is from 2010. There is a UN source that is the text of an agreement and that has no date but it is not necessary.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * All the links except for one. The UBI link that comes from the Indian gov. does not connect to an outside page.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Very much so! It is an interesting topic and in general a good read
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * To my knowledge I did notice any
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * The article is incredibly well organized and builds upon its case in each section. I really enjoy how Dina set up the article giving first an overview and history on Parsi women and then breaking down that into their formal, informal rights, and then that in relation to scripture. It allows the reader to digest the information and grasp how it is all interconnected. Finally, ending with UBI is a risky move but one that Dina executes well because it shows where the Parsi community and women in India in can go going forward.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media N/A


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * The article does meet the Notability requirements as it is able to stand alone. Furthermore, it has enough information to back it up and create its own page.
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * The sources are pretty exhaustive and not only are there academic sources but non-scholarly that add interesting context.
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Yes a table of contents is at the top and then each section has a header and sub sections in bold.
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
 * As far as I am aware it does not.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * This is not possible to answer because this article is a new creation.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * I would say the entire page is strong as it is all new content. Not to say new content is always strong but Dina has placed the material into the article in an effective and convincing way that makes it enjoyable for the reader.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * There should be a UBI against section added and if possible more context and outlay to the intro of the article. This is a stretch but are there photos of Parsi Communities, Parsi women, Parsi women being activists? I feel that could really put your article over the top.

Overall evaluation
First, I want to commend you for taking on the challenge of creating your own page from scratch. It is a difficult task but it is amazing that you found a topic that you are passionate about and believe should be shared with the world. After reading your article I happen to agree with you! I learned so much about the Parsi community and it was presented in a way that engaged the reader but also intrigued them. Your article is thoughtful, well written, resourceful, intriguing, intelligent, and overall a good read. Besides what I mentioned in my comments above about what to fix or add I believe what you have come up with would do wikipedia a great service.