User:Dinakmehta/Women and Gender Relations within the Parsi Community/Karamchand98 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Dinakmehta
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Dinakmehta/Women and Gender Relations within the Parsi Community

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Yes, Dina accurately and concisely describes Parsi women and how they fit in with their community.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes the Lead contains an intro sentence which describes the Parsis and how this community ended up in India in the medieval period. She describes how the community is a subset of the Zoroastrian religious community as well.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * The Lead does not contain a description on the major sections, but it does contain a broad description of women in the community, so perhaps Dina could focus more on the major sections and briefly lay them out in the lead.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * No the Lead does not contain information not present in the article.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * The Lead is concise and effective because it lays out the overall topic of the article.

Lead evaluation
The lead is concise and effective because it discusses Parsi women and it discusses this topic broadly so Dina could later focus on the different aspects of this community she wishes to discuss later in the article.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes the content is based on the role of Parsi women and how the community affects their lives.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * The content is current but the examples Dina utilized are from the early and mid 20th century, but this is perfectly fine because the cases she used as examples are landmark decisions.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * The content on the UBI does not belong because it never addresses Parsi community in the section.

Content evaluation
The content overall is very descriptive and has no bias of a favored position, yet although the material on Universal Basic Income is detailed and central to gender equality, it never discusses the Parsi community in the writing, so perhaps Dina can find a link between UBI and Parsi women.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes there is no bias in the content.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No there are no claims made, Dina develops a neutral and descriptive tone throughout her piece.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * There are no viewpoints that are overrepresented but Dina could discuss the historical accounts of Parsi women and the rights they had/did not have before India became an independent nation. As in when Parsis immigrated to the subcontinent if the woman had a specific set of rights.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No there is no position in the content to persuade the reader.

Tone and balance evaluation
The tone is neutral and Dina effectively relays the information without having any bias.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Yes the content is backed by an anthropological paper and a study by the United Nations.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * The sources are dense as one is an academic paper and the other is a study by the UN. Yes they reflect available literature because they express the interest in this community and the nuances about it.
 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes the sources are current as the paper was written in the past year.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes the links work.

Sources and references evaluation
The sources Dina uses are detailed and reliable, her sources are academic literature and a study by the United Nations in addition to articles.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes the material is well-written.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * There are no grammatical errors in the piece.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * It is extremely well-organized and it reflects the major points of the overall topic.

Organization evaluation
The organization is well-done and there are no errors in the writing but what Dina could do is organize in a manner that introduces the history of rights that Parsi women had historically before India became a nation.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media

There are no images in the piece yet.


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * Yes the article is supported by a UN paper by the Food and Agricultural Organization and an academic paper on anthropology on the subject.
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * There are currently twelve sources and it represented all modern literature but Dina could perhaps find any sources, if there are any, on historical rights Parsi women had when they migrated to the subcontinent.
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Yes the setup is very similar to that of other published Wikipedia articles.
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
 * It does not yet, but Dina can add this later as a finishing touch.

New Article Evaluation
The article mirrors other articles on Wikipedia and the organization is well-done.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * Yes the article is more complete with the detailed information added.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * The strengths are the case examples Dina utilizes to support the topic of women's rights in this community.
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * Dina could detail the court cases a bit more if she likes.

Overall evaluation
The overall evaluation of the article is that it is set up extremely well and she discusses this topic in-depth with its nuances and major events.