User:Dinnerghost/Clothing in ancient Greece/ADhist312 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dinnerghost


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dinnerghost/Clothing in ancient Greece


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Clothing in ancient Greece

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Very strong introduction, including adding the part about what determined what kind of clothing wore.

Very concise introduction

I would possibly keep the section about how climate effected what people wore from intro

Content:

I also liked how you narrowed down all the types of clothing for the original, as some are insignificant, you focused on the more important ones. Good job adding all the different situations that the types of clothing would be worn, instead of just adding descriptions.

These descriptions are also in great detail.

I saw that the nudity section was not finished yet which is ok, but where did you get the information that you have about nudity from? Also what kind of see through fabric was used to show off their bodies?

Very good descriptions of the different accessories worn by the ancient greek. Added more depth than the original page

I would maybe add some situations in which those accessories were to be worn.

You brought up how clothing could double as bedding and had other purposes in your intro, could you possibly expand on that and give some other uses?

How do we know what these clothes were like? Are they any surviving pieces?

Citations:

You do a great job in making sure the info you use is cited.

You also do a good job of narrowing down how many citations are used, as this is a very broad topic to cover

Organization/Media:

You have a lot of descriptions and information, but I would maybe add some pictures to further show what you are talking about.

It does not have to be for every item you discuss, but for some of them it could give a better idea of what you are describing.

This page is very well organized and concise as a whole Tone:

Very good use of tone, you give the info in a straightforward, non-biased way