User:Dlapis/Gender inequality/Katies01 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)

Dlapis


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dlapis/Gender_inequality?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gender inequality

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) Lead

Guiding Questions

The Lead does reflect the new information added in the article paragraphs. The lead talks about the lack of media coverage for women in the sports industry, gender pay gap, and unequal opportunities which are all mentioned in the new information added.

The lead includes an introductory sentence that clearly describes the topic of the new information added, but it does not overall summarize and integrate topics of the entire article. The topic of the new information added is about gender inequality in the sports industry and the different topics of the entire article include income disparities in the workplace, gender stereotypes, disparities in television and film, and more. Overall, I think you did a great job with the lead. It is concise, clear, and there is great information! Just make sure to update it so that it also includes information about the overall article and brief descriptions of the major sections.

2. Content

The new information added which is about gender inequality in the sports industry is relevant to the topic of the article which is about gender inequality. There is a section in the gender inequality article titled "in television and film" which this new information is relevant to because it discusses how women's sports are covered less by the media. Most of the content added is up to date, the most recent article used was from 2019. I think this paragraph was very insightful to the article because it's new information in the article about how gender inequality is also seen in the sports industry.

3. Tone and Balance

The content added is neutral, unbiased, provides statistics, and the first and third article are from a studies conducted and both sources are peer-reviewed journal articles.

4. Sources and References

The links to these sources all work fine and accurately represents the information. The most recent article is the second source which was published in 2019. The sources are peer-reviewed, reliable, and contain other references.

5. Organization

The information added flows very nicely from sentence to sentence and it is organized, easy to read, and well written.

6. Overall Impressions

Overall, nicely written! The information is very insightful and adds on to the topic of the article. The paragraph has enough information and summarizes the information well.