User:Dmctagg1/Cultural appropriation/Dlushing Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dmctagg1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dmctagg1/Cultural_appropriation?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cultural appropriation

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead of this article has been updated in this draft. When focusing on the lead, it starts off with a great introductory sentence that concisely describe the article. Although I think that the lead has a great summary of the article, I think that it could be a little less detailed in order to provide readers with a brief overview of the article. I would suggest removing or condensing a few sentences. I addition, I think that the content that has been added to this article is great. However, I would suggest to add a few more information or manipulate the sentences throughout the lead in order to make it flow better. For example, in the third paragraph, the term "cultural appropriation" is repetitive and the last sentence feels out of place. Overall, the lead contains great information and it presents information that will be further addressed in the body of the article.