User:Dmpopson/Lake Bonney (Antarctica)/Wiki limno Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dmpopson/Lake_Bonney_(Antarctica)?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lake Bonney (Antarctica)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Devon, this is lizzy.

Nice job on the first draft. I thought your organization of the research was well done. One thing to be mindful of, is the balance we are trying to strike between reporting current research and also knowing that Wikipedia is a page accessed by all types of readers. To successfully achieve this, I suggest you continue to make use of linking to other pages (may be useful when talking about stratification in your into paragraph). For the final draft, add more detail on the current research but overall you are moving in the right direction. One thing that I thought might be cool because of your lab's connection (but I'm not sure if you can find citations) is putting details about the research teams and the logistics of how they are able to conduct research here in such remote/harsh conditions. Not required but could be interesting!