User:Dmr415/Drag in Africa/Danielasanchezsev Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Dmr415


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dmr415/Drag_in_Africa?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template#Drag_Theory

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello! Here's my peer review for you,

Lead
The lead has been updated to reflect the new content of contemporary drag in South Africa. The lead also does include an introductory sentence concisely and clearly stating, "Because of South Africa's colonial history and its former structures of apartheid, many of its contemporary drag artists features themes of race and gender in their performances." The lead does include a brief naming of the major sections such as Kenyan and South African drag. The lead does not include information that is not present in the article. The lead is concise.

Content
The lead has been updated to reflect the new content of Evita and drag being a tool of change against "homophobic, transphobic, racist, and other oppressive beliefs." The content updated is up-to-date, as it is from 2018, 2019, and 2020. Perhaps there is more content that can be added to the Kenya section. This article does deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps, for it adds context to the evolving drag in South Africa due to government systems of the time. It also adds context to important contributors to these complex movements. It addresses topics related to historically underrepresented groups such as the queer community or LGBTQ+ group.

Tone and Balance
The content added is neutral, as it primarily focuses on the progressive movements and provides context through a drag lens. There are no claims that seems to be bias to a particular position. There are no claims that seem to be overrepresented or underrepresented, as the focus is the already on the neglected drag scene. The content added does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another.

Sources and References
All new content is backed up by reliable secondary sources of information from Egner, Spruill, Sizemore, Olwage, and Macleod. The content does accurately reflect what the cited sources say, as they outline the contextual evidence of the apartheid in South Africa and the effects of drag. The sources are thorough. The sources are current. The sources are written by a diverse spectrum of authors and include historically marginalized individuals. The sources are all great, as they come from credible professors and educators. All links work.

Organization
The content added is well-written and easy to read. The content added does not have any grammatical or spelling errors. The content added is well-organized.

Images and Media
The article does not include images that enhance understanding of the topic.

Overall Impressions
The content added does improve the overall quality of the article. The strengths of the content added is that it provides a complete story of the effects of drag in an evolving South Africa particularly in terms of their government. The content added can be improved by adding more information about Kenya and adding more sources from underrepresented authors. Perhaps it might also be beneficial to add more information on the specific changes that were happening in the government at the time. Also, maybe adding quotes from actual drag performers to share their perspective in regards to drag being a vessel of change.

- Daniela