User:Dmt2/Eritrean Liberation Front/Amirjeudy Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dmt2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dmt2/Eritrean Liberation Front


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Eritrean Liberation Front

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * 1) The lead concisely and accurately summarizes the articles main sections and expands on the detail in the original article.It only includes content within the article.
 * 2) The article is up to date and extensively expands on the information present in the original article. Though this could be fully a result of my misunderstanding, I'm concerned the article may focus too much on the actions of the EPLF, after the split and may distract from the ELF. This could also be fully necessary as the two are closely related. The page does deal with equity gaps
 * 3) The article is unbiased in its tone, and is presented solely as an educational resource.
 * 4) There are a sufficient amount of references attached to the article.
 * 5) The article is detailed in its content. At times the information can be somewhat difficult to read, due to the fashion it's presented in. It sometimes reads as repetitive and list like. The content is excellent but could be slightly reformatted.
 * 6) The article does not include any images or media.
 * 7) The article has significantly improved in completeness and quality. As previously stated the content has improved and the article has been improved upon, but could use a slight change in how the information is presented.

Response to peer review: I added images and maps to my page. I also added additional section headers and time periods to orient the reader to the time period a certain event took place in.