User:Dnh22/Deaf plus/Liliaboh18 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

dnh22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dnh22/Deaf plus
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * I thought the lead was a good length and gave good information.
 * The lead has many facts back to back. I think maybe you could try to rewrite them so they flow better?
 * When you say, "Hearing loss plus additional disabilities and Deafness and Diversity (D.A.D.) are also used to identify Deaf kids with one or more disabilities," do you mean these are other terms people use to describe people who are Deaf and have additional disabilities? I was a little confused if these were terms or if they were something like tests to determine if someone is Deaf with other disabilities.
 * You have the term "Diagnostic Overshadowing" before your table of contents by itself

Content


 * I would suggest adding a brief paragraph explaining each of the disabilities and how they intersect with being Deaf. Your paragraph on Cerebral Palsy is a good example of this!

Tone and Balance


 * Very neutral tone
 * Gives good information without making suggestions

Sources and References


 * I like that you added links to other Wikipedia pages of topics you mention
 * Sources seem good
 * You seem to back up all of your information with sources

Organization


 * You have a good structure with clear sections
 * In the Cerebral Palsy paragraph you have "Deafness and cerebral palsy considered..." I think you meant "Deafness and cerebral palsy are considered..."

Images and Media


 * You could add pictures if you want to break the sections up if you want later, not necessary

For New Articles


 * You have a lot of links to other Wikipedia articles
 * You have good sources

Overall Impressions


 * I think you did a really good job, especially for a new article


 * I would suggest adding more information in the Disabilities section like I mentioned above
 * Good job picking sources and citing them!