User:Dnh22/Deaf plus/Scroft123 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hayleydt


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dnh22/Deaf plus


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * none

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
- I like how you introduce the topic of deaf plus in the first sentence.

- There is a summary of the different additional disabilities that will be discussed later in the page.

- Only thing I would say to change is taking a few of the last sentences that all have the same source and seeing if you can combine the sentences to make the flow a little better.

Content
- For Hereditary syndromes and maternal infections I appreciate that you linked the existing wiki pages, but I think it would be good to maybe add a short (1-2 sentence) summary of those syndromes so the person reading the page wouldn't have to click on a bunch of link, but if they want more detailed information they can. Another example is farther down with ADHD. You can also then give more context on how that disability specifically affects the deaf population like you did in other sections.

- This article definitely addresses topics related to historically underrepresented populations/topics!

Tone and Balance
- tone is good-- I didn't see anything that seemed biased.

Sources and References
- Great number of sources for all of the sections!

- I liked the use of specific percentages of individuals that have each of the additional disabilities.

Organization
- some of the headings and subsections are a little hard to differentiate-- example is sensory disabilities and deaf blind and learning disabilities. The font sizes and bold are similar.

- I'm not sure how to do this but having a specific references section would help so that it is separated from the "language section" -- right now they blend together it is a little confusing.

Images and Media
- there are no images included in the article-- i'm honestly not sure what images/media would be beneficial for this topic.

Overall
- I think all of the information is really good and I like how you would introduce the disability and then go into detail about how many deaf individuals it affects and how it affects deaf individuals specifically. I just wish that was continued for the first two sections that just had link to the other wikipedia pages.