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"Article Evaluation" "non-performative performance" section: "Similar explorations at the same time" "universities" sections needs expansion: Contact Improvisation's interior techniques; The Underscore -checked sources from citation, all are up to date and sources support the claims in the article. -the article is neutral and unbiased
 * first sentence feels too short and unfinished. Go into it's time and impact (more detailed opening/summary)
 * more contact improvisation pioneers than just Steve Paxton
 * "education tool"- change 'regular' to 'classical'
 * passive voice in sentence in section 'From Magnesium to Contact Improvisations' : "Dance, a form of meditation that is practiced standing, where attention is ..."
 * round robins aren't strictly duos, can be trios, groups of four, etc.
 * go more into the history and round robins, maybe change section title, seems irrelevant to context in paragraph.
 * consider title
 * consider title
 * more in depth in first sentence about "art sport"

Dobbs.sj (talk) 12:55, 25 October 2017 (UTC).