User:DoctorBoon/Isabelle Arsenault/Aaaaaaaac123 Peer Review

General info

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DoctorBoon


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 * User:DoctorBoon/Isabelle Arsenault


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Isabelle Arsenault

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

See Organization below.

Content

The last sentence of the biography is unclear. If understood correctly, it could be rephrased as follows: "Her accomplishments towards the ongoing expansion of children's literature were noteworthy enough to consider her for nomination."

The article mentions that Arsenault was born in Sept-Îles twice (Biography & Childhood).

The phrase "at the age of roughly 5 or 6" could be reworded as it is not a verifiable fact.

The Art Education section

Typos to adjust:

Jane, the  F ox,  and  M e (Capital F, comma before "and" and capital M)

Isabelle Arsenault (Rather than Isabella) in the second to last sentence of the paragraph Biography

Tone and Balance

Some parts of the article include vocabulary that entails interpretation rather than neutral, factual information. For example, the section about Arsenault's style cited from her blog expressed a position on the artist's style. Phrases about Arsenault's technique (in "Style of Illustration") like "confidently conveys emotion" or "evokes emotions in the reader" analyzes the work and how it may be perceived instead of stating a verified fact.

Sources and References

The sources' links direct the reader to the right place. Still, the paragraph on the author's style of illustrations appears to be lengthy for only including two sources. Since one of them is Arsenault's personal blog, which falls into the category of "self-published material," Wikipedia doesn't recognize it as a reliable source. The Publication section was clear and consisted of a useful visual timeline to list her work. However, it seems like there are no sources cited for the information in the chart.Aside from that, the list of references is varied and reliable.

Organization

Overall, the sections are well divided and easy to refer to. The Lead section is rather short. Some information from the artist's biography could be moved to the Lead section to present an extensive introduction to the article. Some sentences may be a bit unclear due to their wording.

Images and Media

NA

Overall Impressions

Although the author should review some grammar or syntax form, the content added to this article was relevant and added a great perspective to the existing piece on the illustrator's life. The chart was a great addition too. Good job with the research!