User:Doctorofwords/Multimedia/Oreok03 Peer Review

General info
Doctorofwords
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Doctorofwords/Multimedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Multimedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
LEAD

The lead has been reviewed, and there are some notable observations. Firstly, it appears that the lead has been updated to reflect the new content introduced by your peer. Secondly, the lead contains an introductory sentence that succinctly outlines the article's topic and highlights its distinction from a related concept. Additionally, the lead offers a brief description of the article's major sections right within the opening sentence. However, it's worth noting that there is some information in the lead that is not present in the article, which may require attention. Lastly, there's a suggestion that the lead might be overly detailed and could benefit from some trimming. Any information removed from the lead could potentially find a suitable place within the article itself to maintain a well-balanced and informative introduction.

CONTENT

The added content is indeed relevant to the topic, and it is up-to-date within the specified time range of 1966-2017. There doesn't appear to be any missing information, and it feels like the article comprehensively covers the subject. However, it does not address any of Wikipedia's equity gaps by discussing topics related to historically underrepresented populations or themes.

TONE AND BALANCE

The content added does not maintain a neutral stance, as there are clear biases present. Some claims within the text heavily favor a particular position, and certain sections of the article seem to present unverified research, for instance, the last paragraph in the 'terminology' section lacks proper sourcing. While there are no apparent overrepresentation or underrepresentation of viewpoints, the content does not merely attempt to persuade but incorporates the author's personal feelings on the topic, deviating from the expected neutrality that should be based solely on factual information.

SOURCES AND REFERENCES

The new content is indeed backed by a reliable secondary source of information, ensuring its credibility. Furthermore, it accurately reflects what the cited sources convey, confirming its fidelity to the original information. The sources are comprehensive, encompassing a wide array of available literature on the topic. They span a significant time frame, from 1966 to 2017, which provides historical context and contemporary insights. Notably, the sources exhibit diversity among their authors, and they make a concerted effort to include historically marginalized individuals where possible, enhancing inclusivity. While there may be more recent sources in databases, the existing selection is deemed substantial. Additionally, the links provided have been verified and are operational, assuring accessibility to the referenced sources.

ORGANIZATION

The content appears to be well-written, featuring concise and clear language that makes it easy to read. It is thoughtfully organized, with multiple headers ensuring that no section is overloaded with information. There are only minor grammatical and spelling errors, such as the presence of two periods in the 'commercial uses' section and a few run-on sentences, but no significant issues are evident. Additionally, the content is well-organized, effectively breaking down the subject matter into sections that align with the major points of the topic.IMAGES AND MEDIA

The article in question incorporates images that contribute to a better comprehension of the topic. While most of the images have well-crafted captions, there is room for improvement in clarifying the significance of photo 2 as an example of multimedia. Importantly, all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright guidelines, ensuring legal use. Additionally, the layout of the images within the article is visually pleasing, striking a balance between not being too large or too small, thereby enhancing the overall reading experience.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS

The recent content additions to the article have not improved its overall quality or completeness, as nothing has been added thus far. There are currently no discernible strengths in the content added, and the article remains unchanged. To enhance the content, it is essential to eliminate the self-researched portion of the article and seek additional sources that could potentially corroborate the existing information or introduce new insights. This approach would ultimately contribute to a more comprehensive and reliable article.