User:Dogsarefun123/History of african american education/Gymshark4321 Peer Review

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Dogsarefun123
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 * User:Dogsarefun123/History of african american education
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of African-American education

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- The lead has been updated to reflect the new content and gives an overview on the cause behind what lead to the segregation in the education system.

- The introductory sentence is clear as it describes the topic of racial discrimination in the education system, and the lead also includes brief descriptions of the major section of the article.

- The lead includes information that is relevant and not mentioned in the paragraph being edited, and the lead if concisely written.

Content

- All the content added is relevant to to the topic and up to date. However, something that I recommend adding is in the second paragraph. In the second paragraph the statistics mentioned about the racial disparities between black and white education is from 1900s which is outdated, so I recommend finding another statistics that is more current which demonstrates the racial disparities. This would show how it is something that is still going on and relevant to the society today.

- The article does address topics related to underrepresented populations and equity gaps in the society.

Tone and Balance

- All added content to the paragraphs are neutral and does not promote any bias towards a viewpoint.

Sources and References

- All the new content is backed up by the secondary reliable source and the content accurately refers with the sources cited.

- While all the links to the sources seem to be accurate and current, there is one source that is outdated and not as current, however, the information provided by the source is relevant and appropriate.

Organization

- The overall organization of the is concise and clear without any grammatical and spelling errors.

- The content is broken down into sections that is concise with the lead information provided.

Overall impression

- You did a great job!

- one thing I recommend is replacing the outdated information in the second paragraph with more relevant information as mentioned before!