User:Dohanminhtho/Acid rain/Henne744 Peer Review

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Dohanminhtho
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Dohanminhtho/Acid rain
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Acid rain

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I found everything in this article to be relevant to the topic of acid rain. Each subsection added, was important to the topic and provided more clear understanding of the impacts. I particularly like the section about the federal governments recommendations for minimizing acid rain but I think the term policies could have better enforced the idea that these are mandated recommendations for safety.

The lead section has been updated nicely to reflect the additions. The lead now encompasses more of the information that will be found in that information.

You also created and section that focuses on human health impacts but I think you could have also mentioned in the title how solutions were also in this section. That way the reader knows all of the information that can be found under that header.

The tone is neutral throughout the paper and has an informative feel rather than an argumentative one. That is very important in wikipedia because no personal agendas come through when I was reading it. The one sentence that wasn't neutral was the warning at the end but I think it was a good to note so that more awareness is spread around. One thing that could have been added nicely is if there is a gap in groups of people impacted by acid rain so that awareness could be shared on inequities caused by acid rain. however if there aren't any than I think this section did a great job in covering its bases. All of the content felt well places and important. More important sections were longer which is great. The sources added seemed relevant and added insightful information.