User:Dominique.visperas/Seventeen (South Korean band)/Alexapar21 Peer Review

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Dominique.visperas
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User%3ADominique.visperas%2FSeventeen_%28South_Korean_band%29&diff=1219792710&oldid=1218451550
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Seventeen (South Korean band)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hello! Looking at your article, I see you've made adjustments to a lot of categories within Seventeen's page, and added pages such as the choreography section and lyrical themes section! Since dancing is so vital to Kpop performance, I think it's great you've added this part. All very relevant to Seventeen and their music. Tone-wise, generally, it's neutral. I thought for a moment about the uses of adjectives like "authentic" and "intricate", wondering if those descriptions were more based on opinion or fact, but ultimately I think that one could argue these are accurate and logical descriptors to their work. (This is just a brief/very picky thought -- I'm not sure how picky the other editors on Wikipedia are going to be!)

Your sources look great; they are all recent, and I see many are from reliable and notable magazines like Billboard, Time, etc! Direct quotes you use are relevant to the topic and not too long; maybe though, since there are quite a few, see if you can put any into your own words/a shorter version. Generally, information presented in the article is cited frequently, which indicates a thorough and diverse range of sources. Additionally, the links/references worked while clicked on, thus, are cited correctly. Great organization and I like how you separated and integrated your new sections into the existing ones.