User:Domino10101/Karen Cho/McLaren481 Peer Review

General info
Domino10101
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Domino10101/Karen_Cho?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Karen Cho

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: You have a strong lead which establishes her identity and what makes her notable. I would just add a word before "in Montreal, Canada". For example, "based in Montreal, Canada" or "from Montreal, Canada". This will just clarify her relationship to the city.

Content: The content you've added to the original article provides much more depth to this filmmaker. The information is concise and pertinent.

Tone and balance: The article is written in a neutral way that still highlights the filmmaker's accomplishments.

Sources and references: You have extensive, reliable resources that are well referenced and cited throughout the article. Some of the references at the bottom have written, not sure if that's indication that there is a URL needed.

Organization: Thoughts are expressed clearly and the article flows well. There is just a period missing at the end of the first sentence of the "Early Life and Education" section, and in this sentence, "By participating in a working group against the urban development of Montreal's Chinatown, she advocated for preserving Montreal's Chinatown's cultural and history significance," I would change "history" to "historical".

Overall impressions: This is a great great improvement on the original article, and sticks to the encyclopedic style.