User:Doublebassplayerv/Evaluate an Article

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(William Grant Still)

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(This article appears to have things that could be improved upon.)

Evaluate the article
(Lead Section: The article contains a concise lead section. It clearly shows what the topic is in the first sentence and a brief overview in the first paragraph. It also only includes information that is included in the article.

Content: The content is all relevant to the topic of William Grant Still and worthy of being included into the article. The content is up-to-date and accurate. This article does deal with Wikipedia's equity gaps because it is discussing William Grant Still who is an African-American composer which would qualify as an underrepresented population.

Tone and Balance: The article is fairly neutral and balanced. It does not appear to attempt to persuade the reader in a certain direction. I do not see any claims that are particularly biased.

Sources and References: Some but not all of the sources are reliable. For instance source #34 is not from a peer reviewed journal or database. Also the link for source #12 does not respond.

Organization and Writing Quality: The organization of this article is quite good and overall does not need much improvement. The writing quality is fair but it suffers in a few areas. For example in the "Life" paragraph the author includes the text "Still told him honestly that he couldn't afford to" when the wording could be more concise and instead read "Still confessed he couldn't afford to" There is also an over-reliance on the pronoun "he".

Images and Media: The article does include images related to the topic however, I do think there could be more photographs included. The photographs included could also be a bit more detailed in the captions.

Talk Page Discussion: Behind the scenes there are conversations about the validity of including race into this article The user claims that the article is including the fact that Still is black perhaps too much. This article is rated Start-Class which means it needs some revisions and more detailed information.

Overall Impressions: The article is useful for the average person looking to quickly find a brief overview of William Grant Still's life and career accomplishments. However, the article could use some fleshing out in the body paragraphs, inclusion of updated sources, and some grammar revisions. )