User:Doyouwannaplayagame/Grand Lake, Colorado/PE054 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing doyouwannaplayagame's article draft


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Doyouwannaplayagame/Grand_Lake%2C_Colorado?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://www.kunc.org/news/2020-02-20/granbys-bulldozer-rampage-captured-the-worlds-attention-now-its-a-documentary

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Hello doyouwannaplayagame, I have just got finished reading the content of your Article Draft in doyouwannaplayagame's. In this article, the writer talks about the history and facts about the The Bulldozer Rampage in Grand Lake, Colorado. Over the This article is well organized with a sense of knowledge about the rampage and Marvin Heemeyer. Great job on the sources that he used for his article overall, there were a link to the article that he was referencing about. I see no signs of plagiarism in your draft, I feel so you need to provide more wiki link in the article. I believed this sentence right here for reference "Over the course of 18 months Heemeyer altered a bulldozer and thus began his plan to wreck the town that he thought wronged him." It needs to have a comma after the word "months". There should be more sources to your article for readers to support your statement in the article itself, I think there needs to be improvement on the intext citations because there isn't any at all in your article.I like the facts you put in the article, very educational facts about the rampage bulldozer and the small towns in grand lake, colorado.