User:Dpe12/2020 United States presidential election/Aah153 Peer Review

General info
Whose work are you reviewing? DPE12

Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dpe12/2020_United_States_elections

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content that is added to the column is very relevant and substantial. The editor (Dpe12) did a great job describing socialism. The editor went into vast detail, and was able to debunk an opposing clause. The distinction between socialist tactics and more progressive tactics was a valuable extension on the editor's behalf because it made the original claim stronger. This passage is written very clearly and it's very concise. Although, the note at the top says that the editor intended to include more, I believe that this feature is sufficient and presents compelling detail and examples that make the overall subject at hand easier to grasp.

Also, the writing is straightforward, and neutral. There are no convincing elements or persuasive tones, the editor does great at providing the necessary material. Overall, I think this is a great feature and I think it is a significant addition to the article and the paragraph truthfully exists well on its own because of how well it’s written.

As far as corrections, I believe the editor would benefit from adding pictures to that section or a graph of some sorry to add visual elements to strengthen their writing