User:Dplf2b/Oxford Calculators/Daryl Gichui Peer Review

General Info

 * Whose work are you reviewing

- Dplf2b


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * - User:Martinmart10/sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * - Oxford Calculators

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall the subject matter is well organized. I like how you are organizing the Article Sources. I got the sense that what was placed in the draft was done so in more of a note-taking way rather than full length sentencing with cited sources following every single sentence, which I think is fine. I can see that there are plenty of notes of the the subjects you plan to cover or address some of which are on the draft that aren’t on the page yet like the topic of The Latitude of Forms or even citing philosophers that the Oxford Calculators has information on but the are not on the Wikipedia page yet.

My only question really is how do you plan to organize this on the actual Wiki page? Do you intend to add more sections devoted to specific people like how they already are on the page or do you want to make subsections for the specific theories you brought up?

Also note word choices that may sway opinion on the people in question. I noticed use of words like critical to describe their work which is fine but could lead to a bias in importance of the person you are talking about...