User:Dqp5391/Human resource management system/Jg1101 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Dqp5391
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Human resource management system

Lead

 * The lead is very complimentary of the article. The lead if anything might be overly detailed.

Content

 * The content is suitable for the overall tone and balance as well as the organization need some altering.

Tone and Balance

 * The balance needs to be adjusted. Incorporate a mixed use of active vs passive voice.  I noticed a lot of the sentences start with "the".

Sources and References

 * The article needs more sources in order to add verification. Also by adding more references, the article will maintain a more neutral position.
 * Also add more in text citations.

Organization

 * The organization is solid. The "Function" section very long and I would perhaps split it up into sub sections.

Images and Media
N/A

Overall impressions

 * The comments I provided are in regards to the original article. I think the article has some great qualities and with a few tweaks and edits with the references it can be really good!