User:Dr.MeowMeow/Organolanthanide chemistry/Re332168 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dr.MeowMeow


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dr.MeowMeow/Organolanthanide_chemistry?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Organolanthanide chemistry

Evaluate the drafted changes
Dr.MeowMeow added to the Lead to clarify what lanthanides are, added a new paragraph on Electronic Structure and a section on Applications, and inserted an image of lanthanides on the periodic table.

In the original article and in Dr.MeowMeow's sandbox, the Lead serves as an introduction and not as a summary of the contents of the article; it doesn't describe the article's major sections. The original doesn't explain what lanthanides are, and in the 2nd sentence discusses transition metals without establishing the relevance to organolanthanides; Dr.MeowMeow's edit fixes this problem and connects the first and second sentences better. However, I think the edit can be more concise; I find the sentence "The bonding between a lanthanide and a carbon classifies as an organometallic bond" unnecessary since it's established prior that lanthanides are transition metals and that organolanthanide chemistry is a type of organometallic chemistry involving lanthanide-carbon bonds.

I think the image is a great addition as the original didn't have any pictures, and showing the lanthanides on the periodic table might help people visualize what lanthanides are better if they've seen the periodic table before.

I also noticed several spelling mistakes throughout the added content, with lanthanides often spelt as "lanthinide".

The new Applications section is excellent in my opinion. The original article was severely lacking in describing why organolanthanide chemistry matters, and this section shows how this type of chemistry is used in real life.

The weakest part in my opinion is the Electronic Structure section. I think the article will benefit from having this section, but currently it doesn't have much substance. Most of the paragraph seems repetitive, just stating that organolanthanides have unique properties, and the last part is a little confusing. I think this section would be improved if it was more concise and worded more clearly.