User:Drabkin247/Judy Freespirit/Blitzyboi Peer Review

Lead

The lead is clear and solid. However, some Wikipedia internal links would be helpful to further clarify some of the concepts.

Content

The content of this draft is well-written and relevant to the subject. It covers Judy Freespirit’s contributions to various fields and her other experiences as a feminist.

Tone and Balance

The content of this draft is mostly neutral. However, some of the sentences could be modified by removing words like “significant”, and “demonstrated”. An editing effort to make the overall tone more descriptive than argumentative would be helpful to improve the article.

Source and References

The article is well-cited and the information from cited sources are reflected properly in the writing of this draft. However, more in-text citations would be helpful for readers to locate the information needed from original sources.

Organization

The article is well-organized. I personally suggest reducing the weight of “her books” and “contribution to feminism” sections. They appear to be too long and too detail-oriented.

Images and Media

There is no image to this article.

New article

This article complies with Wikipedia regulations by citing useful secondary sources and providing enough information to the subject.

Overall Impressions

The articles is informational and well-written. However, the tone of the writing could be improved, especially when describing Freesprit’s contributions.

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