User:Drcarver22/Bark beetle/Parismm Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

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Drcarver22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Drcarver22/Bark beetle
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
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Evaluate the drafted changes
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'''Thank you for your response, I will make the corrections. 11/06/2022'''
 * I think having a question as one of the headings is not great. I have not seen Wikipedia headings in a question format.
 * For the first part, I suggest not elaborating on the three types of bark beetles unless their chemical aspects relevant to chemical ecology are diverse.
 * For the second part, I suggest elaborating more on their attack and the involved chemicals.

Second Peer review:
In general, a reasonable structure should be from broad to specific. In the following lines, I made some comments on the text starting from line one. Hope you find them helpful.

line 1: As they prey on

they accumulate millions of dollars in timber damage... the references should come at the end of the sentence.

These tunnels begin...

xylem and phloem are not the food supply, they are vascular tissue

In this sentence "But these predators don't just prey on one tree, they move based on a chemical signal from a female bark beetle", I do not think these two statements are relevant to be compared with "but". They are suggesting two distinct topics.

and begin to attack

", damaging trees stand after tree stand." this part can be deleted from the sentence.

The following sentence is not clear "The pheromones distinguish as kairomones are hormones, pheromones, or allomones of bark beetles, which in turn is used as a locater by prey that is attracted by it (flies)."