User:Dresden Norris/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Hugo Assmann

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
This article looks like a good one to edit because there is a decent foundation with the biography section, but there is still a lot of room for expansion. Topics like Assmann's influence, personal life, and different periods of his life are either missing or incredibly condensed into just a small biography section.

Evaluate the article
The article begins with a short lede, only two sentences long. It only gives a very basic description of who Assmann was and a brief explanation of his importance to liberation theology. It then heads straight into a biography section which is comprised of many small sub-sections that are only a few sentences each. While these do a decent job at segmenting the different sections of his life, they are all very tiny and only give the barest explanations of the events in his life and his impact and accomplishments. Additionally, many of the sentences are written sloppily or are outright fragments. A rough, repetitive writing style can be observed with sentences like "Ordained priest, he received his doctorate in theology from the Pontifical Gregorian University in Rome." and "Back to Brazil in the early 1980s, he was Professor of Philosophy of Education and Communication at the Methodist University of Piracicaba." When the article reaches its limited descriptions of his impact, it reaches into biased statements without citations like " His life was dedicated to fighting poverty and social exclusion, calling the church and society to take this fight." It very much overall reads like the writing of one person with a clear ideological perspective on Mr. Assman. Many of the different aspects of his life touched on in this biography should be expanded, and put into their own sections. More sources would also be helpful as the article only uses two. Perhaps a picture of him should also be honest.