User:Dsabaria/Creamerie/Blibly Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dsabaria


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dsabaria/Creamerie?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Creamerie

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Great start to your edits, although there are a few things that could be changed condensed a bit:


 * The edited plot description doesn't make it clear who Alex, Jamie, and Pip are and what their relationship is to each other on first glance. When you first mention the three, you don't mention that they are friends and only that they live on a dairy farm. I think first mentioning that they are friends like in the original plot description would work best here. In addition, I think it should be made more clear that Bobby is assumed that he may be the last surviving man in the world.
 * I think that a few of the episode descriptions can be condensed a bit for the sake of brevity. For instance, the description of the opening scene in Episode 1 could be removed altogether. I would also try to avoid plot-crucial details in the episode descriptions as some people may be interested in watching the series and would like to avoid spoilers. However, if you would like to add some more detail to these descriptions, try to be as vague as possible when going over certain details.
 * Again, for descriptions of the main cast, you should try to avoid specifics and keep things vague. For instance, the average reader wouldn't know what being "blessed" entails unless they have watched the series. Try to keep the average person in mind when writing descriptions for characters and keep it as brief and as vague as possible.
 * Maybe for the episode list you can also add who directed and wrote each episode as well as when the release dates for each episode were?
 * Try and find more reviews of the show to add to the "reception" section of your article. Try researching more behind-the-scenes articles and cast/crew interviews to add more to the "production" section of the article.