User:Dsabaria/Creamerie/Toygle Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dsabaria


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Dsabaria/Creamerie?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Creamerie
 * Creamerie

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * I noticed that you added details about the episodes plot. Something include are the details in that empty table with the director writers and air date that is found in the original wiki page.
 * Something at the end was the mentioning of the man hunter, I think there should be some elaboration on who or what that is.
 * Similar things start to pop up when looking at individual episode summaries, where things that are mentioned and aren't necessarily explain, It would help add context when you explain terms, like what is a bliss ball or why is that important to mention it in the summary.
 * Overall very solid content everything is just small additions.