User:Dtzung/Arria Ly/Cloudynoir Peer Review

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Dtzung, Oronsay, Ipigott, GhostInTheMachine
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 * Arria Ly
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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

The Arria Ly wikipedia page has a very strong lead. It describes who Arria Ly was in a perfectly curated introductory sentence. It also briefly describes some of the prominent events that happened to Arria Ly throughout her career. The lead does include a description of the article's major sections. It does not include information that is not present in the article. I believe that this is a well built lead because it is extremely concise, yet it also introduces ideas and topics that will later be explained in greater detail in the rest of the article.

Content:

All of the content added is relevant to the topic and is up to date. No content appears to be missing upon reading the draft. There also is no content that does not belong in the entire article. This article deals with one of Wikipedia’s equity gaps and is related to historically underrepresented populations and topics. The article does deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps, it deals with how Arria Ly's contributions in the French Feminist Movement was often seen as controversial by both men and women, due to her radical views on celibacy and anti-marriage campaigns. Arria Ly was often set apart from other mainstream French feminists of her time because of her aggressive and non-popular views, thus this topic relates to a historically underrepresented woman.

Tone and Balance:

The content added is neutral. There are no claims that appear to be heavily biased towards any particular position. There are also no viewpoints that are over or under represented throughout the article. Overall, the article is very informative and concise. I do not believe that the content added makes an attempt to persuade the readers in favor of a certain position.

Sources and References:

Yes, all of the content in the article is backed up by reliable secondary sources and the content accurately reflects what the cited sources say. While the article does include some hyperlinks, I think there should be more added to some of the pronouns and events that the article also mentions throughout. Also has a great reference list at the bottom of the article. The sources are through and reflect the available information and literature on the topic. The sources are pretty current, most are from the early 2000's and one is from the 80's. They also did an excellent job including sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors, most sources coming from books but also having some from articles. All links work well.

Organization:

The organization of this article is notable. It is well-written and concise all throughout. Including several dates throughout Arria Ly's life and career benefitted the article greatly because it made it easy to read and understand. There are no grammatical or spelling errors that I came across. The article also does a great job in breaking down several sections which in turn keeps the structure well-organized.

Images and Media:

The article only includes one black and white image of Arria Ly. The image is well-captioned including her name and the year that the image was taken/published. The image also adheres to Wikipedia's copyright regulations and is laid out in a visually appealing way at the beginning of the article to showcase to the readers what Arria Ly looked like.

Overall impressions:

The article expands on an existing article about Arria Ly that only included brief information about her career as a radical feminist and activist. The newly added content drastically improves the overall quality of the information given about this feminist and the role she played in French society in both the 19th and 20th century. The strength of the content added is that it actually delves into the many prominent moments of Ly’s life and gives a better overall background of her childhood and familial life before she became an advocate for women’s rights. The inclusion of Ly’s views on politics and controversial takes were also highlighted in the newly added content which greatly benefited the article as a whole. The only thing that can be improved is to add more hyperlinks throughout the article if possible.