User:Dtzung/Arria Ly/Orangetulip12 Peer Review

General info
Dtzung, Ellabogomilsky, Nbhakdibumi
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Dtzung/Arria Ly
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Arria_Ly - in French

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article does a great job at summarizing the life of Arria Ly. It seems the writers were able to find a lot of really valuable information from a number of notable sources. The writers did a great job at staying neutral and summarizing the most relevant content in their lead section. If they could improve any aspect of the article I would say it would be to adjust the "sexual abstinence" and "legal issues" sections of the articles. These sections seemed a lot shorter and could possibly be combined with another section or adjusted in order to make the article more concise. Overall, really well done. I was able to learn a lot from their article!